[Chilln]

Originally Posted by babywizard

Two recent weeks, we have been talking via video call every nights, maybe till 5 a.m She's a student, she has time to rest, but I'm a new one in our company. Career and love

be straight and tell her that you have to have a good career to take care of your family now and then, if she wants to get along with you; unless she doesn't care, tell her to find a rich boy-o and go f*ck herself.

[linhtcnz]

When will the time be
(a) slower
(b) faster
than it should normally be?

[Mr.6]

Originally Posted by linhtcnz

When will the time be
(a) slower
(b) faster
than it should normally be?

(a) breaking up with ur girlfriend
(b) in love with the above one

[Chilln]

Originally Posted by Mr.6

(a) breaking up with ur girlfriend
(b) in love with the above one

My god, that's the best answer! =))

//I've just shot around in CS 1.6, f*cking amazing! It's quite a long time since I quit playing it!

[Baby | DieHard]

Anyone check this for me pls

OPEN LETTER

To: Foreign Business, Offices, Experts in Vietnam
On behalf of board of managers and all staffs of Dia Nam Trading Joint Stock Company, we would like to send all best wishes for you and expect your cooperation and assistance.
Our company joint-venture with Sao Viet Law Office, we supply all-in services for all foreigners in Vietnam, include:
- Advice to customers about houses, apartments, offices, workshops for rent, buying and selling.
- Supply free legal consultant service
- Supply legal procedure according customers request, like setting up business.
In fact that, we have satisfied many foreign customers and companies in Hanoi.
Our company owns professional, enthusiastic and experienced staffs in real estate field so we believe that we will supply the suitable property for you in the shortest time.
We are in the vanguard of real estate field into broker service. We leased, served and satisfied with the choosy customers who have high requests for example: Experts of Japanese embassy in Hanoi, Honda Vietnam, Panasonic Vietnam,…
Now, we have a great deal of properties with low prices at: Keang Nam Ciputra, The manor, Trung Hoa, My Dinh, Thang Long international village, Lang Ha, Villas in Westlake, Hoan Kiem, Hai Ba Trung, Ba Dinh,..with area from 70-206 sq.m, from 2 bedrooms to 5 bedrooms. Lease duration if the lessee has any troubles with rental house, our company will give you a hand in solving that troubles.
As a customer of our company, you will have the best consultant and be served enthusiastically and exactly in finding down apartment, house, office, land, shop,…as your desire. Our focus has been and remains customer success, return on investment and satisfaction
We wish your interest and cooperation.
You can search our website: www dianam.vn to find information about house for rent and sell.

[Chilln]

OPEN LETTER

To: Foreign Business, Offices, Experts in Vietnam
On behalf of the board of managers and all the staffs of Dia Nam Trading Joint Stock Company, we would like to send all best wishes to you/wish you all the bese and expect your cooperation and assistance.
Our company joints venture/is a joint-venture with Sao Viet Law Office, supplying all-in services for all foreigners in Vietnam, including:
- Advices for customers in houses, apartments, offices, workshops ??? for rent, buying and selling.
- Supply free legal consultant service
- Supply legal procedure as requested, like setting up business.
In fact that, we have satisfied many foreign customers and companies in Hanoi.
Our company, with professional, enthusiastic and experienced staffs in real estate field, confidently believe that we will supply the suitable property for you/ provide/bring your the most suitable products in the shortest time.
We are in the vanguard of real estate field into broker service. We leased, served and satisfied with the choosy customers who have high requests for example: Experts of Japanese embassy in Hanoi, Honda Vietnam, Panasonic Vietnam,…
Now, we have a great deal of properties with low prices at: Keang Nam Ciputra, The manor, Trung Hoa, My Dinh, Thang Long international village, Lang Ha, Villas in Westlake, Hoan Kiem, Hai Ba Trung, Ba Dinh,..with area from 70-206 sq.m, from 2 bedrooms to 5 bedrooms. Lease duration if the lessee has any troubles with rental house, our company will give you a hand in solving that troubles.
As a customer of our company, you will have the best consultant and be served enthusiastically and exactly in finding down apartment, house, office, land, shop,…as your desire. Our focus has been and remains customer success, return on investment and satisfaction
We wish your interest and cooperation.
You can search our website: www dianam.vn to find information about house for rent and sell.

Sorry for not finishing it but I'll be back again in the afternoon, kinda busy now.

Some notes to remind you:
- Red: If this was written by me, I would have written it that way.
- Yellow: I prefer "provide" or "bring" rather than "supply"
- White: not necessary.
- ???: I guess it is "workshop consultancy" or "workshop organizing", not "buy", "sell" or "for rent", isn't it?
// You should hire someone who is good at writing or ask for a help because this kind of writing seems not so professional in a Vietnamese way, not English.

[Chilln]

I'm back! A bit late than expected!

Seems like no one is interested in correcting this, so I'm gonna give it another try!
Please note that I correct the paragraph in my own writing style and the red colored sentences with ??? are so obscure to me so I leave them as they are!

We are proud to be in the vanguard of providing broker service in real estate field. We leased, served and satisfied even the most fastidious customers who had high requests such as: Experts of Japanese embassy in Hanoi, Honda Vietnam, Panasonic Vietnam,…
We are now having a great deal of properties with low prices at Keang Nam Ciputra, The manor, Trung Hoa, My Dinh, Thang Long international village, Lang Ha, Villas in Westlake (???), Hoan Kiem, Hai Ba Trung, Ba Dinh (???) etc with area from 70-206 sq.m, from 2 bedrooms to 5 bedrooms. Any troubles with rental houses during leasing time will be supported by our company.
As a customer of our company, you will have the best consultancy and be served enthusiastically and exactly in finding down apartment (???), house, office, land, shop,…as your desire. Our goal now and then is to maintain customers' success, return on investment and satisfaction.
We are looking forward to your interest and cooperation.
For more information about house for rent and for sale, please visit our website at: www. dianam.vn

[Baby | DieHard]

Thanks you, Chilln

I have to compose a open letter for my company, it's too hard for me cause my writing skill is not good and you have helped me so much, i don't know how I can ever thank you enough.

For the red colored sentences with ??? you have bookmarked:
- Workshop: Nhà xưởng
- Villas in West Lake: I mean, "Các biệt thự khu Hồ Tây"
- Hoan Kiem, Hai Ba Trung, Ba Dinh:
- finding down apartments, house...: "Tìm kiếm các căn hộ, nhà ở..."

Thanks again, Chilln, with all due respect

[Chilln]

You are welcome, bro!

Since you have noted it, I would suggest you with these:
- Workshop: ok, I just misunderstood it with "conference" so leave it.
- Villas in West Lake and Hoan Kiem, Hai Ba Trung, Ba Dinh: I guess this should work: "Villas by West Lake and real estate in districts such as: Hoan Kiem,....."
- finding down sounds kinda strange to me 'cus I've heard that word, maybe you could say:"finding your desirious apartments..."
- use "etc" instead of "..." because there's no "..." in English writing.
- when looking up the dictionary for some word, you should pay attention to the note "(thông tục)" in every description and do not use it in formal cases like this letter.

Hope that help and good luck with your work!

//Since this is only me who correct this, could some one get in here and provide some more suggestions? Sadly that in serious times all of you guys just disappear!

[Mr.6]

the 1st thing i must say is im not a kind of person who good at writing. So i will do as much as i can. Maybe now ur letter is almost completed with Chilln 's hands. But ok, we r here to discuss, right? So feel free to leave it if u r not satisfied

We are in the vanguard of real estate field into broker service. We leased, served and satisfied (1) with the choosy customers who have high requests for example (2):

(1): i think using this sentence in this kind of letter is not the good way. I jus feel its so dry when I reached to this point. If its me, i 'd like to write it as: We leased, served and we make people satisfied even when they r the choosy customers with high requirements....
(2): in my opinion, putting "like" or "such as" (as Chilln did) is better than using "for example" here. So its ur choice.

from 2 bedrooms to 5 bedrooms

- why dont u put only 1 "bedroom" instead of 2? - from 2 to 5 bedrooms?

Lease duration if the lessee has any troubles with rental house, our company will give you a hand in solving that troubles.

- On the lease duration, you people will have our best support given by our company if you have any trouble. (i think Chilln 's idea about this part is good, this is jus my one way i want to give because i did nt get ur sentence from the 1st time i read)

As a customer (1) of our company, you will have the best consultant and be served enthusiastically and exactly in finding down apartment, house, office, land, shop,…as your desire (2)

(1): "be a customer" is a thing i think we should use here
(2): in seeking for apartments, houses, offices etc

These r jus some ideas of mine. The rest i think that they 've done with Chilln.
And i think for this type of letter, we should find a way to bring it to customer like..... solemnly somehow, right? But i can not figure it out... somehow again

To Chilln: ur rich eng writin is making me curious Do i get a foreigner overhere? or some kind of person who works with eng the whole day??
Again, my ideas also r given according to my experience, maybe they r not correct at all. So refer it carefully. Happy to be here to help!